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Post by colleen4ever on Aug 18, 2007 22:31:08 GMT -5
Thanks. I thought that it would bee funny if Guido was the one falling down begging for mercy!
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Post by GundamZero on Aug 18, 2007 23:34:44 GMT -5
No kidding, since it was his fault they were late (He's lucky he ducked Polly's punch, with the amount of strength she's got).
My upcoming chapter will have the Rovers and Cats combining their forces to take Parvo down, as he tries to destroy Hunter and Colleen before they can say their wedding vows. Once the villains are out of commission (I'm planning on having them get captured, since it seems appropriate, as they do try to kill Hunter and Colleen on what should be the best day of their lives, but you can always have them escape again in a future story), the wedding resumes, and Hunter and Colleen do a duet to 'Love Lifts Us Up Where We Belong'.
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Post by colleen4ever on Aug 19, 2007 0:31:11 GMT -5
Ok...but can I make a few wedding suggestions...cause I did kind of want to write part of the wedding. Like I wanted Colleen to come in in a gold cloak..and than the Sultan and Lady Tressa remove it to show her dress to Hunter for the first time. Also two attendants would be reading Bible verses...and you will have th Sultan, his family, Shag, Exile and Blitz give 'I marry you in the name of...' blessings, right? Xavier would be waving incensee and Lavinia would be throwing rose pedals.
Also the processional would be 'Bright Moring Stars' by Judy Collins. Shee'd also sing 'The Rose' in the middle of the ceremony.
I hop you don't ind these suggestions. I mean, do you? That's what I had in mind at least...
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Post by GundamZero on Aug 19, 2007 22:40:26 GMT -5
That sounds great!
Ch.10 will have Blitz apologizing, and then bringing in Hunter's mom, Starlight. She and her son have a nice reunion, and then Colleen and Starlight hit it off famously. Hunter and Colleen both accept Blitz's apology, and The Master then comes and congratulates both of them, since he'd flown in with Blitz and Starlight.
For the fight scene in Ch.12, where the Rovers and Pizza Cats are fighting Parvo's goons, I'll use the song 'Blow Me Away', by Breaking Benjamin, which I think is a very good song for the situation.
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Post by colleen4ever on Aug 20, 2007 0:17:17 GMT -5
I think so too. So, is the chapter ready yet?
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Post by GundamZero on Aug 20, 2007 0:57:06 GMT -5
Yes. I've actually decided to use another song instead of 'Blow Me Away'. It's called 'Hunger', by Spectre General. It's from the 1986 Transformers movie.
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Post by colleen4ever on Aug 20, 2007 0:58:06 GMT -5
Oh? I've never heard that one. How does it go?
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Post by GundamZero on Aug 20, 2007 1:25:38 GMT -5
It starts off with:
'When I see what I want, I'm gonna take it! If it's against some law, you can bet I'll break it! My need to live gives me the will to survive! I've gotta find it fast to keep me alive! I can't believe my eyes... HUNGER!!! I want it so bad I can taste it! It drives me mad to see it wasted! When I need it so bad that it's burnin' me! I'm hungry...!' That's the first verse.
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Post by colleen4ever on Aug 20, 2007 12:23:15 GMT -5
WOW!! Sounds dangerously like Parvo! But it also sounds like a great battle number!!
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Post by GundamZero on Aug 20, 2007 13:52:37 GMT -5
I sent the MP3 to you.
Here's the scene where the brawl is about to start (This will be Chapter 12)
*Parvo and Groomer are standing there, along with their Cano-Mutant soldiers. The Cats have changed out of their formal attire, and are now wearing their armor. Hunter and Colleen got their armor from Exile, who'd thought ahead, since he knew Parvo would be coming.* Sultan: "Guards, take the guests down to the bunker! Clear the area so that these gallant heroes can put a stop to these despicable terrorists!" Parvo: "Hah...I think not! You mangy mutts have stood in my way for the last time. PREPARE TO DIE!" Speedy: "So, you're General Parvo, huh? Hunter told me all about how you kidnapped the Prince, and on his birthday of all days! You disgust me!" Polly: "YOU'VE GOT TO BE THE MOST VILE, COWARDLY, ROTTEN LOWLIFE ON THE FACE OF THE EARTH!!! FIRST, YOU RUIN THE BIRTHDAY OF A LITTLE BOY, AND KIDNAP HIM TO BOOT, THEN YOU TRY AND RUIN THE HAPPIEST DAY OF OUR NEW FRIENDS' LIVES!!! YOU'RE GONNA PAY FOR THIS!!!" Parvo: "Haha..I don't think so. You know what, there's three things I hate about you." Polly: "Oh yeah..what are they?" Parvo: "First off...you're another bunch of miserable do-gooders that can't keep your noses out of my business. Second, have you ever heard of breath mints, and third...I HATE CATS!" Speedy: *sees Polly tense up, and start flexing her fists* "Uh..oh..he's dead!" Polly: "OH REALLY?! WELL, GUESS WHAT, CHROMEDOME...I'M NOT EXACTLY OVER THE MOON ABOUT YOU EITHER!! YOU'RE UGLY, YOU'RE A DESPICABLE COWARD, AND YOU'VE JUST REALLY TICKED ME OFF!!! OH...ONE MORE THING...HALLOWEEN'S OVER, SO WHY ARE YOU STILL WEARING YOUR COSTUMES?" Speedy: "MAYBE THEIR BOTH THAT UGLY NATURALLY!" Groomer: "Why you little..." *hears something coming in fast* Good Bird: "LOOK OUT BELOW!!!"*lands on Groomer* Sultan: "GUARDS, SEIZE HIM!!!" Speedy: "Uhh...actually...Your Highness, he's a friend of ours. Sultan, Rovers, I'd like to introduce you to our friend, Good Bird." Good Bird: "An honor, Your Highness." Guido: "Hey, what happened? You're late." Good Bird: "That's the last time I ask Lucille for directions, or let Francine launch me. Next time, I'll fly on my own." Guido: "You too, huh?" Polly: "Guido, SHUT UP!!! We've got a battle to win here. Now, LET'S GO!!!" Hunter: *charges forward, punching Cano-mutants out of his way.* Colleen: "HIYA!!! MUSTANG!!! LIGHTNING!!! THUNDERBOLT!!!" (Three famous American WWII fighter aircraft) *takes out about twelve Cano-Mutants* *Down in the bunker* Starlight: "Oh my...that's my son...and my new daughter! Look at them go! I'm so proud of them!" Lady Tressa: "I can see why. Your son truly is a wonderful dog, and I can see where he gets it from." Starlight: *blushes* "Thank you, Your Highness...I'm honored." *back in the palace* Exile: "Here is payback for trying to ruin my comrades' wedding!!!" *freezes Parvo solid* Blitz: "You're not getting away with trying to kill my friends on their special day! Here's my objection to YOUR objection!" *bites Parvo as hard as he can* Parvo: "YOOOOOOOOOOWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!" Hunter: "Lights out, Parvo!"*cracks him over the head with his fist, knocking him out.* *Groomer tries to escape, but Colleen and Polly tackle her, and tie her up.* Speedy: "Okay, let's take out that flying tin can of his!"*pulls out his swords* "Cat's Eye Slash!!! HIYA!" Guido: *pulls his katana* "AZURE DRAGON FIRE!" Polly: *pulls her flute and katana* "HEARTBREAKER!" Good Bird: *readies his sword* "THUNDERBIRD!" *Parvo's aircraft is destroyed, and the Sultan's guards round Parvo and Groomer up, and take them off to prison* Hunter: "Come on, Colleen. Let's get our good clothes back on. We've got a wedding...OUR wedding, that needs to be done." Colleen: "Huntie..."*they kiss, then they go and change, along with everyone else.*
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Post by colleen4ever on Aug 20, 2007 17:24:58 GMT -5
Not bad. But I was gonna have Blita say 'I object to your objection just as the chapter 11 ends and the Rovers prepare for battle. I think you should have Good Bird say something like 'Geronomo!' as he lands. Also let him get up kind of groggily and say 'Happy Birthday!' before he comes to. Also Good Bird should just be standing in the wings seeing as how he doesn't have a clue what's going on. The Cats can explain it to hi as the Rovers are putting their good clothes back on. Also, when Hunter and Colleen are kissing Exile should say something like 'Hey, you two can't do that until you're married, Comrades!'
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Post by GundamZero on Aug 20, 2007 20:38:54 GMT -5
Thanks. I'll keep that in mind for when I get to Ch. 12.
How's chapter 11 coming?
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Post by colleen4ever on Aug 21, 2007 1:23:13 GMT -5
It's all done. thanks for posting it up
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Post by GundamZero on Aug 21, 2007 22:35:00 GMT -5
No prob! I've got the new chapter up now, and I gave it the finishing touches you recommended.
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Post by colleen4ever on Aug 21, 2007 22:49:33 GMT -5
And ut looks great. I sent you my next one a few minutes ago.
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